so i thought i was done, shows how much i know, but the new one does look alot easier to read. have to toss out the big bold fonts and work with more spacing. i was just about to send this n get it printed. So glad i didnt...
You have come a long way. The change in the size of the text and the fact that you put the most important information at the top, defines the hierarchy. But there now needs to be a great deal more refinement. The line of text under the jeans picture should not run across the page. Very dominant heading! Why is it in black? This looks like a sale and not a club thing? Good font choice and color for the heading. Now you need to stop the centering of the text and understanding of tracking and Kerning. That is the way you use text: the distance between the words and letters. I would love to see more roughs and dominance of the bottom left side. Lets push though all stodgy stuff and just let out some roughs
You have come a long way. The change in the size of the text and the fact that you put the most important information at the top, defines the hierarchy. But there now needs to be a great deal more refinement. The line of text under the jeans picture should not run across the page. Very dominant heading! Why is it in black? This looks like a sale and not a club thing? Good font choice and color for the heading. Now you need to stop the centering of the text and understanding of tracking and Kerning. That is the way you use text: the distance between the words and letters. I would love to see more roughs and dominance of the bottom left side. Lets push though all stodgy stuff and just let out some roughs
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